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The Sacrifice for One-part 1 by ~Escapetomymind:iconEscapetomymind:



Encircle to me the clippings of the lost wings
That would have lifted me up to where I want to be.

So sad this tale, tears are shed
Of one angel, left for dead.
Once a mortal, loving true, so lost of paradise for the Sin-
He loved too much and gave her up.
She was his One. He gave her up-
To the man he envied, and his paramour loved.
Let the man be Sin, and the mortal lover Sacrifice.
Sin was evil, with madness on his shoulder chattering in his ear. He did not love the One.
By means,  Sin was meant to die. Sacrifice forsaw-
And due to virtuous heart, and loving tender to his One-
He met death halfway. For his One he did adore, to the reaper he did implore-
"Take me as pleb, and set him free. To my shoulders I steal his burden, and cloak him hidden in my light. Exchange us places and positions, so She may live a Happy life."

Life's opposite peered into sacrifices heart and thought, and so deemed him worthy of such a bargain.
He ordained, and stripped Sacrifice of his good, portrayed upon sin, whose heart seemed lighter for reason unexplainable to he.
Mancled and weighed by Sin's heavy deeds, though clad in pale wings spun of goodness revealed nature true.
Into hell he did march, in the name of the happiness of his One.
He was well recieved.
:iconescapetomymind:

Author's Comments

Okay... Ive been reading a lot of paradise lost.
This is turning out to be an epic. I needed to force myself to stop.
Part 2 coming soon :D

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:iconknucklesrulzxd:
My god, you always do this to me, I start reading and I can't stop...one day I'm gonna see one and just ask if I can write a full story based off of your writing.

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Yes I'm a proud male fan of many shojo and shonen manga.
MANGA IS MADE FOR ENJOYMENT NOT SEXISM!!!

God...is an alchemist. xD
:iconescapetomymind:
Hahaham thats a good thing, right?
When you say that one day you are going to see one, you mean One, right? The girl.
Your perfectly allowed to write anything you like based off my stuff as long as you place a comment in the dedications section or on the last page or something.
Hell, I would be thrilled and impressed if you could write a whole book. Thats really flattering.
would you like me to update now?

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Me: Dad, where do babies come from?
Dad: Well, we got you at wall mart, your brother at target...
Me: HUH?!
Dad: What? It was a blue light special.
Me: You got me ON SALE?!
Mom:That explains a lot, we got your sister at Best buy.
:iconknucklesrulzxd:
You take your time updating, I know how it is to have people on you about updating, I don't like it and rushing others is just hypocritical right?

I just meant one of the writings that I can really hit and start writing right after reading it. I'd give you credit, I don't try to pass off other people's work as my own. ^^

I can't write a book, the best I can do is a deviation but it gets the word out. xD

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Yes I'm a proud male fan of many shojo and shonen manga.
MANGA IS MADE FOR ENJOYMENT NOT SEXISM!!!

God...is an alchemist. xD
:iconescapetomymind:
danke :D
It makes my heart soar to hear that.

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Me: Dad, where do babies come from?
Dad: Well, we got you at wall mart, your brother at target...
Me: HUH?!
Dad: What? It was a blue light special.
Me: You got me ON SALE?!
Mom:That explains a lot, we got your sister at Best buy.
:iconknucklesrulzxd:
Danke means thanks right? xD

Hearing that makes me feel like I'm actually good at something, thank you. ^^

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Yes I'm a proud male fan of many shojo and shonen manga.
MANGA IS MADE FOR ENJOYMENT NOT SEXISM!!!

God...is an alchemist. xD
:iconescapetomymind:
no problem :D
praise for praise, I always say.

--
Me: Dad, where do babies come from?
Dad: Well, we got you at wall mart, your brother at target...
Me: HUH?!
Dad: What? It was a blue light special.
Me: You got me ON SALE?!
Mom:That explains a lot, we got your sister at Best buy.
:iconknucklesrulzxd:
Never heard that one, sounds like a good policy. ^^

--
Yes I'm a proud male fan of many shojo and shonen manga.
MANGA IS MADE FOR ENJOYMENT NOT SEXISM!!!

God...is an alchemist. xD
:iconescapetomymind:
its kind of like 'an eye for an eye makes the whole world go blind'

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Me: Dad, where do babies come from?
Dad: Well, we got you at wall mart, your brother at target...
Me: HUH?!
Dad: What? It was a blue light special.
Me: You got me ON SALE?!
Mom:That explains a lot, we got your sister at Best buy.
:iconknucklesrulzxd:
I know that one. ^^

--
Yes I'm a proud male fan of many shojo and shonen manga.
MANGA IS MADE FOR ENJOYMENT NOT SEXISM!!!

God...is an alchemist. xD

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